In the last little
while I’ve worked through a few sets of edits on my new novel. When I sent off
the final manuscript, all those months ago, I thought that the writing was as
good as I could make it. But there’s nothing like an editor to show you up, amiright*?
My editors have
picked up all sorts of issues, but a big one is my frequent use of ‘filler’
words. I make sentences more complicated than they need to be. I add in ‘very’
and ‘mostly’ and ‘a little’ much** more than is necessary.
I’ve wondered
before if women use filler words more than men. There has been plenty written
about the way women speak compared to men, however a recent experience editing
a man’s memoir shows me that males are just as capable of using filler language.
What are
filler words?
If you’re
modifying every adjective with ‘very’, you’re using filler language. Other
culprit words include: a little, mostly, almost, terribly, quite. There are: just,
only, almost, slightly, seemed, perhaps, maybe, simply, somehow, absolutely, basically,
actually, sort of and kind of.
Then there are
the combinations: really quite, really very, almost a little bit, basically
only, perhaps somehow.
What’s wrong
with filler language?
1. It takes up space. If you’re writing a 700-word
blog post, do you need five repetitions of ‘very’ or six ‘mostlys’? Words are precious.
Make them count.
2. It doesn’t add anything. ‘It was a very
dangerous trip’ has the same meaning as ‘it was a dangerous trip’. Dangerous is
a strong word; let it stand on its own.
3. It sounds apologetic. We don’t need to
apologise for what we communicate. ‘Softening’ with filler words isn’t
necessary.
4. Brevity is clarity.
When might
you use filler words?
If you’re a
blogger with a distinctively personal voice, part of your repertoire of communication
effects may be to use certain filler words. If you’re aware of using them, and
choose them deliberately, go for it!
How do you
know if you use filler words?
The ‘search’
function in your word processor is a useful tool. Crank it up and type in any
or all of the words I’ve listed above. You might find you have an unknown
penchant for ‘quite’ or ‘actually’.
(Hot tip: If you get recklessly lethal and
use the ‘Search and Replace’ tool to eliminate your ‘verys’ be sure to put a
space before and after the word, otherwise ‘everybody and everything’ ends up
being ‘ebody and ething’ through your document. This is complicated to repair.)
Read through
your document. If you use a distinctive word (not just a typical ‘filler’ word)
twice or more, throw it into the search function too. I discovered by doing
this that I overuse the word ‘crazy’ when I write teen fiction. Too much crazy…
well, it’s too much crazy.
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What are
your filler words? Why do you use them? How will you get rid of them?
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Cecily Paterson
is an author of eight ‘braveheart’ novels for girls, a memoir and a biography. Find
her books at www.cecilypaterson.com
She also teaches writing at www.redloungeforwriters.com
*I say this
with affection. I work as an editor.
**Oh look… I didn’t
need that ‘much’ either.
Thanks Cecily. Excellent advice! I recall spending a weekend retreat removing filler words in one of several edits of my novel - including 460 instances of the word 'just'. (And no, it wasn't a legal thriller ;) )
ReplyDeleteEven if it was a legal thriller, they 'just' shouldn't be there. (:
ReplyDeleteI've had to remove zillions of filler words from my novels. 'A bit' was everywhere. I do like to use them as part of one of my characters' voices though. Thanks Cecily.
ReplyDeleteThat's a great tip about putting the space before and after the word you're replacing. There's a horse in my novel that's mentioned a number of times and is important to the plot. After getting some advice from my horsey friends, I decided to change it from a stallion to a mare, and subsequently thought it would be good to change the name from Star to Sapphire. The only problem was that I forgot about all the words that have 'star' in them (start, startle, starboard, starlight). Took a while to fix that one :) 'The Word-Loss Diet' by Rayne Hall is a great book for finding and getting rid of all those words.
ReplyDeleteThanks for this reminder. I know that when I was writing for a church newsletter years ago, I had to "ruthlessly" eliminate all fillers as I had limited space. I learnt to be very succinct. Blogging, I am much lazier. One of the fillers I know I use to soften (or apologise) is "for me" - sometimes I even use "for me personally" Haha!
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